Monday, June 18, 2012

Book Review: Exposed By Bonnie Lamar


Author; Lamar, Bonnie
Book Title; Exposed (Elianna Brennan Book 2)
Genre: Young Adult Historical Mystery/Action/Love Story

In this second installment of the Elianna Brennan Series, our heroine picks up where she left off in Essence of Re. 

Elianna's father is now more in the picture. He was depicted in the first book as over-bearing and over-protective, he now turns out to be quite laid back in the second half of the book.  Maybe that’s because our heroine and her cohorts have decided that at the age of 17 (where of course, here in the States EVERYONE carries a passport or has access to one and their parents keep a credit card and cash handy in an emergency that their child can get to.  Um, NO.) they can get up and leave the country without so much as a second glance by the adults selling them plane tickets or the TSA questioning their age.  OH…  that leaves the over-bearing parents out, now doesn’t it?

Where the first book was obviously trying to be historically interesting, the second just confuses the reader.  The plot is weak, so much so, that I was ready to put the book down and start something else. 

As I continued to read through the book, I shook my head asking myself, “Where are the parents?”  The main characters have approached each of their houses at a reasonable hour at night seemingly waiting for our heroine to simply say “I need you”, and then everyone is up and ready to go, yet NO parents are awake to notice their children leaving the country or even the HOUSE in the early night (before midnight!).  Not to mention that someone is actively bleeding from a GUN SHOT wound and is still able to get through airport security?!?  This simply pushes the envelope of believability.
The actions of the adults in this book, dealing with teenagers like they’re in their 20s or even older, confounds me. The setting in is Cairo, do they really treat teenagers like experienced 20 or 30 year olds in Egypt?  The adults there sure do put a lot of stock in the “abilities” our heroine has without one thought about her safety or that of her friends

Our author however, has improved her speech for our teenagers, though at times contractions are still not used, making our characters sound like robots.  They still speak as if they’re in their 20s as well, and rely on the experiences of the movies they’ve watched as well as the video games they’ve played together, to make spy like plans that rival those of ”007!” 

Inconsistences are found throughout the book as well, from the healing time of our heroine to whether or not a specific person is eating a chicken or a turkey sandwich in the SAME paragraph.  Where were the EDITORS for this version?

I found this second installment encourages behaviors in our youth that should not be encouraged, (such as running away out of the country, and the adults that lie to cover for them so they can avert being in trouble with their parents.), but in the same vein doesn’t depict the teenager today realistically.  I mean, at 17 years old, if you’re in a foreign country, in a hotel room with your significant other and no adults around with hormones bouncing off every wall, would you not take your relationship to the next level by taking advantage of the situation and make love if you’ve found your “eternal soul mate”? 

The next problem I have with this book is where the climax of the plot ends up.  There are no visitors allowed at this particular “tourist attraction” at night, as far as I know, yet a taxi driver is willing to take four teenagers, and drop them off miles from it, out in the desert, to walk the rest of the way because he was tipped well?  Not to mention, anyone who knows anything about the exhibits of history in Egypt knows that there is a certain individual who watches vigorously over the antiquities of his country.  So, the plot itself is now completely unbelievable, as well as the ending.

I can appreciate trying to influence the youth of today to make good judgment calls, encourage them to do their homework and think out of the box to solve problems, because let’s face it, today’s kids are constantly looking at phone screens and computers and have the social skills to prove it.  Our heroine didn’t get a cell phone until she was 17, whereas most kids in elementary school have one today.  Her friends didn’t mention having one at all!  No laptops?  Just 2 game consoles at a friend’s house?  WOW!  How unique.

Finally, the author undermined her own writing by having a conversation between characters, while still trying to explain in detail what was going on around the characters as the conversation was happening.  I had to read the conversation twice to understand who was saying what. I then read it to my husband who said, “OK you lost me, who’s talking?”  Imagine the reaction of the target audience if two 40 year olds couldn’t figure it out.  Simply too much detail and adjectives describing the surroundings and not enough for the conversation, which is pivotal to the plot to take place!

Would I recommend this book to my friends?

Nope.  Don’t waste your time.

½ out of 5 Bookmarks

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